Saturday, July 16, 2011

Is this introduction interesting?

That's good! You have good conflict and are fleshing out the attitudes and thought processes of the characters. I would like to see more of the scene, what kind of car, descriptions of Daniel, James and Riley, whats the weather like? You don't have to throw it all out in a list, fit a little bit in every couple sentences. Also, I like the dialogue. Very interesting. Keep it up!

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